Grace: Your resume is really organized, and I like how you have the different sections in bold so you can locate everything easily. Also, the format works very well, and you include details about your experiences without using “I” which can be hard to do. Especially since we are so used to using “I” when writing about ourselves. Even though the experiences you have on your resume are amazing, I’m not sure if we can have two pages for your resume because on the rubric, we can only have one.
Rachel: I like the overall format you have; it is very organized. I also like that everything is under a bolded title so everything can be located easily. The only thing I would suggest is possibly adding more details to your work experiences. I suggested that because there seems to be a little more white space at the bottom that could be filled. These details could be (for example) elaborating the complex policies you had to explain and enforce, just to be less broad. I just thought about how I should elaborate more on my resume as well.
Maeve: I like the format, it is very organized, especially with the bolded categories for each section. You check all the boxes with the categories that need to be included on a resume. The details added for each job you have had are just enough to explain what you did without “boring” the reader. I would suggest trying to format it, so it fits on one page because I think the rubric says it should only be a page.
Sarah:
I think your resume looks really good and you did a nice job using the space. I love how you have all your information at the top where it can be seen nice and clearly, everything is organized which creates a nice flow. You bolded certain things in the beginning like Communications and Sociology to make the important things that can be seen if the reader was to skim it. I also really like how you included your relevant coursework. I would also just add more skills and experiences depending on the job you’re looking for. If it’s that job you were talking about when doing the cover letter, I would include your years of experience in the outdoors and all the little things you can do (if you can track scat/footprints, build a fire without using a lighter, identify plant species, knowledge on which plants hold water like moss and which flowers you could eat for survival if needed, etc) they are small but really important if you’re trying to get a job, so if you have any of those or any others definitely add them.
Emily:
Love. Simply love. I think you did an amazing job, it’s so aesthetically pleasing before even actually reading it. I really love how you also made a complete section separated from the rest for your volunteering, the fact that you volunteered looks great and also makes it look (in my opinion) like you have more experiences simply because you had an extra section…I’m not sure how to word it the way I want to lol but I think it was a nice touch. I really don’t have anything for a critique. I mean there’s the second page with a lot of white space but there’s really nothing you can do. Maybe if you wanted to make the whole thing smaller in font size…but other than that I’m not sure because I wouldn’t want to cut anything out, I ran into the same issue with extra white space or things being cut in the middle onto a different page.
Kit:
You had a very neat and organized resume that had a nice flow. I like how you really sold yourself in the skills area with not only naming so many great skills but also wording them so nicely (to me it made you sound more professional and like you had a lot of knowledge and experience in that field you’re applying for). I don’t really have anything for a critique other than in the beginning you said “MaineHealth” and I wasn’t sure if it was supposed to have a space between it so I was gonna say if so just double check for spelling and grammatical errors but other than that great job!
Kiara Resume Notes
I think like Jesse says your high school diploma isn’t needed if you’re saying you’re enrolled in school. With that I think adding your expected graduation date for college would be helpful. I also think making the descriptions of your work experience more skimmable would be good. I love the information you have in it! But the paragraphs of text aren’t easy to skim. Also making sure there are the same amount of bullets in the list under Career Skills is important. I also think moving the education portion of your resume would be a good idea. You have a lot of white space to the right of listing your education that you could fill in with some information. I like the headings though as they make it very easy to navigate and know where certain information is located.
Grace Resume Notes
In your relevant experience I think it makes sense to be listed by what you’ve done most recently which doesn’t look like it does. I also don’t know if you should have “May 2025” listed and should instead have “starting date-present.” May 2025 hasn’t happened yet and while it may be your intention to continue working there you don’t know what may happen in the future and you may not be able to. I worry it may come off weird to employers. I also think you should fill the second page if you’re going to use it. You could add your references there or go more in depth about some of your work experience to flesh it out but I for sure think if you’re going to go onto that second page use all of it! That’s extra space to talk about yourself with. I really like the way yours is set up though I might be biased as mine is the same way. I think under the skills and qualifications section though you could use bullet points. You use bullet points under every other section as a descriptive tool but not under your skills which seems a little out of place.
Maeve Resume Notes
I think if you’re going to go onto the second page you need to fill it! Don’t be scared to talk a little more or compress some things so it’s only one page. To conserve some space I don’t think there needs to be the extra line between the job title/description and the bullets of the expectations from your job. I like that you kept the number of bullet points the same for each job that you described. I think you could be a bit more descriptive in your skills of how long/what specific way you used these skills.
Jack P: Jack, this is a very good draft. I think the formatting and organization is both strong and incredibly consistent throughout. You do a good job of not letting there be too much space and air, and your contact information is concise and clear. I think the Professional Summary is strong, but could be worded a bit better. I get the message and what career you are looking for, but I think just in case, you could specify it a bit more. Also, I personally might avoid using the word “Prestigious” in regards to the school you attended. Only reason I say this because you might come across as a little too snobby and pretentious, which is not a good first impression to make. Other than that, you are very consistent with what you provide, you avoid using first person and everything appears to be organized well. Nice job overall.
Wen: Wen, at first glance, your resume is very clean and really organized in terms of formatting. I really like the way everything looks and you do a good job of explaining your experiences and skills. I think my only suggestions would be to take a closer look at your objective. I think “reward” might be grammatically incorrect in the way you are using it, and you want to avoid using “I”. I just think a little more focus could be aimed at the objective because it will be one of the first things employers see when viewing your resume. Also, I personally would avoid using popping colors. I see a lot of blue on this resume and it might be considered a distraction to some employers. Finally, I think the quality of your skills and experience is very good, but I personally think your skills could be first, followed by your experience. I just don’t know if leading with your education background is what I would do, but other than that, you do a really good job of selling yourself and your formatting is incredibly clean.
Bennett: This is the most professional looking resume between all four of ours, in my opinion. I really like how you brought up some experience you have in volunteer work and club managing, and spun it to make it relevant to what you are applying for. However, I am looking at the side of your resume that lists your hobbies and interests, and it looks like “drama” in drama club is misspelled. Also, as much as I like the photograph of yourself, I personally would remove it, as it may leave a bad taste in the employer’s mouth. Finally, I think the education portion is very strong, but I personally would leave out your GPA, unless you are 100% confident in it. Some people believe including your GPA might work against them because of statistical comparison, so to be safe, I might leave it out. Other than that, I think you do a really good job.
Cameron, I thought your summary was very well written and professional to me. I think you have a ton of great information to work with and it’s very thorough. I’m not sure how many pages it shows up for on your end but for me it’s three pages, if it’s not already single spaced that would be my only critique. You could also make the font size 11 if you haven’t already.
Sarah, I really like the visual appeal of your organization. I think it’s professional and easy to read. I think it was the right choice to put the sections in the order you did; it makes sense. The only thing I have to suggest is to add a period at the end of the sentence in the objective.
Emily, I love the way you formatted everything and added a pop of color. I think it’s appropriate and translates well in the field of journalism/writing. It makes me think of how it’s acceptable to have a little “fun” with your resume in creative fields like graphic design, and would be wildly inappropriate for a corporate job. My two suggestions would be to see if you could mess with the margin to make it fit one page, and there’s a missing period in the Old Orchard Beach Elementary School volunteer section.
Bennet: I really like the look of your resume, I think in terms of the format with regards to how the text is put together, this is organized very nicely. I may be in the minority here, but generally speaking, I would advise against including a picture of yourself in your resume. It is my understanding that in terms of what it generally culturally acceptable here in the United States and in much of the west, that you typically shouldn’t include a picture of yourself on your resume. I also notice that there is no objective included in your resume, which may be helpful in showing your potential employer what you are interested in or what you are looking for. In terms of content, however, I think that this is very good. I’d advise cleaning up your format, and I think that your text is really good and well written.
Jack S: I think that you may want to consider making radical revisions to your formatting. There’s a lot of white space in your resume which gives your draft the appearance of a list. I think that there may be something worthwhile in trying to find some kind of template online, or adding some kind of graphic design element to make the data you have written appear more organized. Currently the resume feels empty, but I think that using a template, or organizing what you have written differently would fix this. Additionally, I notice that certain words have been capitalized and others have not seemingly at random throughout the resume. For example, “Experience working on Stage Production and Light Effects throughout middle school”, it doesn’t seem consistent with what is capitalized and what isn’t. I would capitalize the first word, and put all the rest of the words in lower-case. I think that there is a strong foundation here, however, and you just need to make some overhaul adjustments and this resume has the potential to be truly great.
Jack P: I think this resume has really good stuff written, but would benefit from a different format. There are many templates online which you might consider using, or implementing your own original flair to make your work tightened up into something more organized. Overall what you have written is very good, I think. The skills and experience you have listed all seems relevant. One thing I would change is that the key skills segment is unbalanced, with a total of 7 skills listed. I would either us 6 skills, or include one more and do 8 so that it is visually balanced.
Cameron –
I appreciate how thorough your resume is! I feel that this document gives a well-rounded understanding of who you are in a professional and personal setting. I would remember to try to condense some of this information, like in your summary, it states that you’re dedicated and your first quality is dedicated. While consistency is good, that’s two lines where other qualities could be highlighted or condensed. Similarly, with your work history, I like the detailed layout but the page split for the Wine and Spirits may be funny to the eye. I can relate to working many customer service jobs and it might be helpful to condense some of the similarities throughout the jobs. For example, taking orders and answering phone calls could be reworded or reorganized so employers don’t feel they are reading the same thing over.
Emily –
I appreciate how you played with the layout and fit so much important material in an organized manner. It’s interesting how although there are similarities throughout your experiences, each explanation shows you strengthened your current skills and gained new ones as well. It’s also great to see that you have a range of people that you’ve worked with from kids to adult reading audiences. Lastly, I’m not sure if this is my document but there’s one run-on sentence that goes to the next page at the end of your education. I’m sure if you play around with the format it could all be on one page. Overall, great document that shows your experiences and dedication.
Kit –
I appreciate the layout of your resume, it’s clear and digestible to the eye. You did a good job of using action verbs in your relevant skills and experiences, it definitely shows you have experience and awareness in your end objective. Since your experiences are a big chunk of your paper, it might be worth restructuring the order of your skills. For example, I would put the laboratory skills and safety standards closer to the top to strengthen the idea of experience. With your relevant coursework, it might be helpful to make a new section or bold the word coursework so it stands out more and has more impact. Finally, adding a brief description under your employment history could give employers a general idea of what you did and the skills you gained.
Rachel – Overall, the layout of your resume, as well as the order of your experience looks great! There is probably more experience that you can pull out of each of those positions! You have well-rounded experience, and I think you can probably use stronger verbs to convey that more powerfully!
Kiara – I think adding some bold headings would make this resume look a lot cleaner! I would add some different sizes in your heading to highlight your name and contact information, as well as bolding some of your job titles! In addition, the career skills section might be changed to add some more details, as the skills listed are very vague. I believe you can also remove your high school information from the education sections as well!
Maeve – I like your layout! I would say to underline the section headings to distinguish them from the job titles you list! You do a great job with the language in your job descriptions, I particularly like the Starbucks one, and I think you put a good spin on your job duties there! I would work on trying to condense it to one page, and maybe make the font for the job descriptions just a tiny bit smaller and I think that should do it.
Cameron — You have a lot of experience! I really like the amount of information you included, including your various experiences, qualities, skills, etc. That being said, I do think you can exclude some of the information. For example, I don’t think that the persona summary or qualities is necessary. I like that both of the sections humanize you, but I feel that you should prioritize the other sections. Removing or reworking those sections will help you cut this down to one page (also, maybe try utilizing the columns sections). I also think you can format the experience sections under each job differently to take up less space. Overall, you have all of the information you need; the doc just needs some reformatting.
Sarah — You used great descriptive words for each work experience! I also really like the relevant coursework section. I wonder if there’s an opportunity to expand on what you learned in each class. I think your resume could use a little more stylization- maybe try adding line breaks, columns, and italics. Also, one small nitpick: the dates on your experience and education sections aren’t consistent (ex, June 2020 – Aug. 2021 vs Aug. – Dec 2024). Overall, you have lots of good info here, and I recommend re-formatting to make the most of your space and potentially add more info.
Kit — This resume looks really good! You have all of the information you need, and the order makes sense. I like the line breaks and general formatting. I might just recommend that you make your name bigger. You have a good amount of information and experience. I think you should try to find a way to add some information about each job experience. You may want to also be more specific in your relevant skills section.
Bennett: I think your resumes strong points have to do with the clean format you’ve chosen with your picture included and some nice looking visual fields that make the information less of a chore to read as an employer. I gladly read the full resume without hesitation because of its friendly formatting. However, I think the objective of the jobs you are seeking could be more clear. It sounds like you have plenty experience using different types of softwares from your gaming experience. It also looks like you understand business based on your completed courses. I think including the info that you did is a smart move, just apply the resume more to what you are applying for is my only advice.
Jack: This is my second time being able to work with you and provide my insight based on our contrasting styles. Like the cover letter, I think you do a good job of explaining your abilities very thoroughly. I think this trait about you can end up being a double edged sword because you are so descriptive that it gives the reader a good idea of the type of person you are, but at a certain point the amount of information can be subconsciously intimidating to read for someone skimming resumes. I believe that are moments in your resume that you could combine accolades that will get the same message across using less page to make your information more concise. If you could get your resume to a singular page I think it would play a big advantage when comparing your resumes to other people.
Wen: Honestly Wen, this resume looks quite flawless to me as far as formatting and looks go. I like the way you get your messages across as well, concise, professional, and informative. Your objective is clear and your accolades support you for the mission you are looking to accomplish with the document. My singular piece of advice would be to fix one part of your format where there is extra white space in between your professional experience and skills and abilities. On top of that adjustment, I would then say you have more space to include more things to help your case because of the extra space you will have to work with.
Bennett: I think your resumes strong points have to do with the clean format you’ve chosen with your picture included and some nice looking visual fields that make the information less of a chore to read as an employer. I gladly read the full resume without hesitation because of its friendly formatting. However, I think the objective of the jobs you are seeking could be more clear. It sounds like you have plenty experience using different types of softwares from your gaming experience. It also looks like you understand business based on your completed courses. I think including the info that you did is a smart move, just apply the resume more to what you are applying for is my only advice.
Jack: This is my second time being able to work with you and provide my insight based on our contrasting styles. Like the cover letter, I think you do a good job of explaining your abilities very thoroughly. I think this trait about you can end up being a double edged sword because you are so descriptive that it gives the reader a good idea of the type of person you are, but at a certain point the amount of information can be subconsciously intimidating to read for someone skimming resumes. I believe that are moments in your resume that you could combine accolades that will get the same message across using less page to make your information more concise. If you could get your resume to a singular page I think it would play a big advantage when comparing your resumes to other people.
Wen: Honestly Wen, this resume looks quite flawless to me as far as formatting and looks go. I like the way you get your messages across as well, concise, professional, and informative. Your objective is clear and your accolades support you for the mission you are looking to accomplish with the document. My singular piece of advice would be to fix one part of your format where there is extra white space in between your professional experience and skills and abilities. On top of that adjustment, I would then say you have more space to include more things to help your case because of the extra space you will have to work with.
Kiara
Overall I really liked your resume. I’m sure that it can be hard making one with only two job experiences but you did a great job navigating this. You have a great skill summary and I loved the bullet pointed section but just a small thing to mention is that there is an extra bullet point with no words. Another note on the bullet points is to add them to what skills you gained with each job. This will just make it easier to read. Great start!
Rachel
I know that you wish to pursue a career in law so I think that it will be very important for you to highlight any sort of law experience that you have. You could implement this into your skills section and put it first in your resume if you are applying to jobs in law. Something that I think you could also fix is the sizing of your lettering. Although I personally love how big your name is it is most common for resumes to have text to be sized 10-12 pt. Making anything above that smaller and then adding a skills portion should make your resume a page.
Grace
I thought your resume was very impressive and I loved that each of your bullet points started with a very to grab the employers attention. Something that I also loved was that the jobs you have and the sections were bolded, it brings your eye to them. If I were to change anything I would add an objective at the top and possibly try and space out a few things to make your resume a full two pages.
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Grace: Your resume is really organized, and I like how you have the different sections in bold so you can locate everything easily. Also, the format works very well, and you include details about your experiences without using “I” which can be hard to do. Especially since we are so used to using “I” when writing about ourselves. Even though the experiences you have on your resume are amazing, I’m not sure if we can have two pages for your resume because on the rubric, we can only have one.
Rachel: I like the overall format you have; it is very organized. I also like that everything is under a bolded title so everything can be located easily. The only thing I would suggest is possibly adding more details to your work experiences. I suggested that because there seems to be a little more white space at the bottom that could be filled. These details could be (for example) elaborating the complex policies you had to explain and enforce, just to be less broad. I just thought about how I should elaborate more on my resume as well.
Maeve: I like the format, it is very organized, especially with the bolded categories for each section. You check all the boxes with the categories that need to be included on a resume. The details added for each job you have had are just enough to explain what you did without “boring” the reader. I would suggest trying to format it, so it fits on one page because I think the rubric says it should only be a page.
Sarah:
I think your resume looks really good and you did a nice job using the space. I love how you have all your information at the top where it can be seen nice and clearly, everything is organized which creates a nice flow. You bolded certain things in the beginning like Communications and Sociology to make the important things that can be seen if the reader was to skim it. I also really like how you included your relevant coursework. I would also just add more skills and experiences depending on the job you’re looking for. If it’s that job you were talking about when doing the cover letter, I would include your years of experience in the outdoors and all the little things you can do (if you can track scat/footprints, build a fire without using a lighter, identify plant species, knowledge on which plants hold water like moss and which flowers you could eat for survival if needed, etc) they are small but really important if you’re trying to get a job, so if you have any of those or any others definitely add them.
Emily:
Love. Simply love. I think you did an amazing job, it’s so aesthetically pleasing before even actually reading it. I really love how you also made a complete section separated from the rest for your volunteering, the fact that you volunteered looks great and also makes it look (in my opinion) like you have more experiences simply because you had an extra section…I’m not sure how to word it the way I want to lol but I think it was a nice touch. I really don’t have anything for a critique. I mean there’s the second page with a lot of white space but there’s really nothing you can do. Maybe if you wanted to make the whole thing smaller in font size…but other than that I’m not sure because I wouldn’t want to cut anything out, I ran into the same issue with extra white space or things being cut in the middle onto a different page.
Kit:
You had a very neat and organized resume that had a nice flow. I like how you really sold yourself in the skills area with not only naming so many great skills but also wording them so nicely (to me it made you sound more professional and like you had a lot of knowledge and experience in that field you’re applying for). I don’t really have anything for a critique other than in the beginning you said “MaineHealth” and I wasn’t sure if it was supposed to have a space between it so I was gonna say if so just double check for spelling and grammatical errors but other than that great job!
Kiara Resume Notes
I think like Jesse says your high school diploma isn’t needed if you’re saying you’re enrolled in school. With that I think adding your expected graduation date for college would be helpful. I also think making the descriptions of your work experience more skimmable would be good. I love the information you have in it! But the paragraphs of text aren’t easy to skim. Also making sure there are the same amount of bullets in the list under Career Skills is important. I also think moving the education portion of your resume would be a good idea. You have a lot of white space to the right of listing your education that you could fill in with some information. I like the headings though as they make it very easy to navigate and know where certain information is located.
Grace Resume Notes
In your relevant experience I think it makes sense to be listed by what you’ve done most recently which doesn’t look like it does. I also don’t know if you should have “May 2025” listed and should instead have “starting date-present.” May 2025 hasn’t happened yet and while it may be your intention to continue working there you don’t know what may happen in the future and you may not be able to. I worry it may come off weird to employers. I also think you should fill the second page if you’re going to use it. You could add your references there or go more in depth about some of your work experience to flesh it out but I for sure think if you’re going to go onto that second page use all of it! That’s extra space to talk about yourself with. I really like the way yours is set up though I might be biased as mine is the same way. I think under the skills and qualifications section though you could use bullet points. You use bullet points under every other section as a descriptive tool but not under your skills which seems a little out of place.
Maeve Resume Notes
I think if you’re going to go onto the second page you need to fill it! Don’t be scared to talk a little more or compress some things so it’s only one page. To conserve some space I don’t think there needs to be the extra line between the job title/description and the bullets of the expectations from your job. I like that you kept the number of bullet points the same for each job that you described. I think you could be a bit more descriptive in your skills of how long/what specific way you used these skills.
Jack P: Jack, this is a very good draft. I think the formatting and organization is both strong and incredibly consistent throughout. You do a good job of not letting there be too much space and air, and your contact information is concise and clear. I think the Professional Summary is strong, but could be worded a bit better. I get the message and what career you are looking for, but I think just in case, you could specify it a bit more. Also, I personally might avoid using the word “Prestigious” in regards to the school you attended. Only reason I say this because you might come across as a little too snobby and pretentious, which is not a good first impression to make. Other than that, you are very consistent with what you provide, you avoid using first person and everything appears to be organized well. Nice job overall.
Wen: Wen, at first glance, your resume is very clean and really organized in terms of formatting. I really like the way everything looks and you do a good job of explaining your experiences and skills. I think my only suggestions would be to take a closer look at your objective. I think “reward” might be grammatically incorrect in the way you are using it, and you want to avoid using “I”. I just think a little more focus could be aimed at the objective because it will be one of the first things employers see when viewing your resume. Also, I personally would avoid using popping colors. I see a lot of blue on this resume and it might be considered a distraction to some employers. Finally, I think the quality of your skills and experience is very good, but I personally think your skills could be first, followed by your experience. I just don’t know if leading with your education background is what I would do, but other than that, you do a really good job of selling yourself and your formatting is incredibly clean.
Bennett: This is the most professional looking resume between all four of ours, in my opinion. I really like how you brought up some experience you have in volunteer work and club managing, and spun it to make it relevant to what you are applying for. However, I am looking at the side of your resume that lists your hobbies and interests, and it looks like “drama” in drama club is misspelled. Also, as much as I like the photograph of yourself, I personally would remove it, as it may leave a bad taste in the employer’s mouth. Finally, I think the education portion is very strong, but I personally would leave out your GPA, unless you are 100% confident in it. Some people believe including your GPA might work against them because of statistical comparison, so to be safe, I might leave it out. Other than that, I think you do a really good job.
Cameron, I thought your summary was very well written and professional to me. I think you have a ton of great information to work with and it’s very thorough. I’m not sure how many pages it shows up for on your end but for me it’s three pages, if it’s not already single spaced that would be my only critique. You could also make the font size 11 if you haven’t already.
Sarah, I really like the visual appeal of your organization. I think it’s professional and easy to read. I think it was the right choice to put the sections in the order you did; it makes sense. The only thing I have to suggest is to add a period at the end of the sentence in the objective.
Emily, I love the way you formatted everything and added a pop of color. I think it’s appropriate and translates well in the field of journalism/writing. It makes me think of how it’s acceptable to have a little “fun” with your resume in creative fields like graphic design, and would be wildly inappropriate for a corporate job. My two suggestions would be to see if you could mess with the margin to make it fit one page, and there’s a missing period in the Old Orchard Beach Elementary School volunteer section.
Bennet: I really like the look of your resume, I think in terms of the format with regards to how the text is put together, this is organized very nicely. I may be in the minority here, but generally speaking, I would advise against including a picture of yourself in your resume. It is my understanding that in terms of what it generally culturally acceptable here in the United States and in much of the west, that you typically shouldn’t include a picture of yourself on your resume. I also notice that there is no objective included in your resume, which may be helpful in showing your potential employer what you are interested in or what you are looking for. In terms of content, however, I think that this is very good. I’d advise cleaning up your format, and I think that your text is really good and well written.
Jack S: I think that you may want to consider making radical revisions to your formatting. There’s a lot of white space in your resume which gives your draft the appearance of a list. I think that there may be something worthwhile in trying to find some kind of template online, or adding some kind of graphic design element to make the data you have written appear more organized. Currently the resume feels empty, but I think that using a template, or organizing what you have written differently would fix this. Additionally, I notice that certain words have been capitalized and others have not seemingly at random throughout the resume. For example, “Experience working on Stage Production and Light Effects throughout middle school”, it doesn’t seem consistent with what is capitalized and what isn’t. I would capitalize the first word, and put all the rest of the words in lower-case. I think that there is a strong foundation here, however, and you just need to make some overhaul adjustments and this resume has the potential to be truly great.
Jack P: I think this resume has really good stuff written, but would benefit from a different format. There are many templates online which you might consider using, or implementing your own original flair to make your work tightened up into something more organized. Overall what you have written is very good, I think. The skills and experience you have listed all seems relevant. One thing I would change is that the key skills segment is unbalanced, with a total of 7 skills listed. I would either us 6 skills, or include one more and do 8 so that it is visually balanced.
Cameron –
I appreciate how thorough your resume is! I feel that this document gives a well-rounded understanding of who you are in a professional and personal setting. I would remember to try to condense some of this information, like in your summary, it states that you’re dedicated and your first quality is dedicated. While consistency is good, that’s two lines where other qualities could be highlighted or condensed. Similarly, with your work history, I like the detailed layout but the page split for the Wine and Spirits may be funny to the eye. I can relate to working many customer service jobs and it might be helpful to condense some of the similarities throughout the jobs. For example, taking orders and answering phone calls could be reworded or reorganized so employers don’t feel they are reading the same thing over.
Emily –
I appreciate how you played with the layout and fit so much important material in an organized manner. It’s interesting how although there are similarities throughout your experiences, each explanation shows you strengthened your current skills and gained new ones as well. It’s also great to see that you have a range of people that you’ve worked with from kids to adult reading audiences. Lastly, I’m not sure if this is my document but there’s one run-on sentence that goes to the next page at the end of your education. I’m sure if you play around with the format it could all be on one page. Overall, great document that shows your experiences and dedication.
Kit –
I appreciate the layout of your resume, it’s clear and digestible to the eye. You did a good job of using action verbs in your relevant skills and experiences, it definitely shows you have experience and awareness in your end objective. Since your experiences are a big chunk of your paper, it might be worth restructuring the order of your skills. For example, I would put the laboratory skills and safety standards closer to the top to strengthen the idea of experience. With your relevant coursework, it might be helpful to make a new section or bold the word coursework so it stands out more and has more impact. Finally, adding a brief description under your employment history could give employers a general idea of what you did and the skills you gained.
Rachel – Overall, the layout of your resume, as well as the order of your experience looks great! There is probably more experience that you can pull out of each of those positions! You have well-rounded experience, and I think you can probably use stronger verbs to convey that more powerfully!
Kiara – I think adding some bold headings would make this resume look a lot cleaner! I would add some different sizes in your heading to highlight your name and contact information, as well as bolding some of your job titles! In addition, the career skills section might be changed to add some more details, as the skills listed are very vague. I believe you can also remove your high school information from the education sections as well!
Maeve – I like your layout! I would say to underline the section headings to distinguish them from the job titles you list! You do a great job with the language in your job descriptions, I particularly like the Starbucks one, and I think you put a good spin on your job duties there! I would work on trying to condense it to one page, and maybe make the font for the job descriptions just a tiny bit smaller and I think that should do it.
Cameron — You have a lot of experience! I really like the amount of information you included, including your various experiences, qualities, skills, etc. That being said, I do think you can exclude some of the information. For example, I don’t think that the persona summary or qualities is necessary. I like that both of the sections humanize you, but I feel that you should prioritize the other sections. Removing or reworking those sections will help you cut this down to one page (also, maybe try utilizing the columns sections). I also think you can format the experience sections under each job differently to take up less space. Overall, you have all of the information you need; the doc just needs some reformatting.
Sarah — You used great descriptive words for each work experience! I also really like the relevant coursework section. I wonder if there’s an opportunity to expand on what you learned in each class. I think your resume could use a little more stylization- maybe try adding line breaks, columns, and italics. Also, one small nitpick: the dates on your experience and education sections aren’t consistent (ex, June 2020 – Aug. 2021 vs Aug. – Dec 2024). Overall, you have lots of good info here, and I recommend re-formatting to make the most of your space and potentially add more info.
Kit — This resume looks really good! You have all of the information you need, and the order makes sense. I like the line breaks and general formatting. I might just recommend that you make your name bigger. You have a good amount of information and experience. I think you should try to find a way to add some information about each job experience. You may want to also be more specific in your relevant skills section.
Bennett: I think your resumes strong points have to do with the clean format you’ve chosen with your picture included and some nice looking visual fields that make the information less of a chore to read as an employer. I gladly read the full resume without hesitation because of its friendly formatting. However, I think the objective of the jobs you are seeking could be more clear. It sounds like you have plenty experience using different types of softwares from your gaming experience. It also looks like you understand business based on your completed courses. I think including the info that you did is a smart move, just apply the resume more to what you are applying for is my only advice.
Jack: This is my second time being able to work with you and provide my insight based on our contrasting styles. Like the cover letter, I think you do a good job of explaining your abilities very thoroughly. I think this trait about you can end up being a double edged sword because you are so descriptive that it gives the reader a good idea of the type of person you are, but at a certain point the amount of information can be subconsciously intimidating to read for someone skimming resumes. I believe that are moments in your resume that you could combine accolades that will get the same message across using less page to make your information more concise. If you could get your resume to a singular page I think it would play a big advantage when comparing your resumes to other people.
Wen: Honestly Wen, this resume looks quite flawless to me as far as formatting and looks go. I like the way you get your messages across as well, concise, professional, and informative. Your objective is clear and your accolades support you for the mission you are looking to accomplish with the document. My singular piece of advice would be to fix one part of your format where there is extra white space in between your professional experience and skills and abilities. On top of that adjustment, I would then say you have more space to include more things to help your case because of the extra space you will have to work with.
Bennett: I think your resumes strong points have to do with the clean format you’ve chosen with your picture included and some nice looking visual fields that make the information less of a chore to read as an employer. I gladly read the full resume without hesitation because of its friendly formatting. However, I think the objective of the jobs you are seeking could be more clear. It sounds like you have plenty experience using different types of softwares from your gaming experience. It also looks like you understand business based on your completed courses. I think including the info that you did is a smart move, just apply the resume more to what you are applying for is my only advice.
Jack: This is my second time being able to work with you and provide my insight based on our contrasting styles. Like the cover letter, I think you do a good job of explaining your abilities very thoroughly. I think this trait about you can end up being a double edged sword because you are so descriptive that it gives the reader a good idea of the type of person you are, but at a certain point the amount of information can be subconsciously intimidating to read for someone skimming resumes. I believe that are moments in your resume that you could combine accolades that will get the same message across using less page to make your information more concise. If you could get your resume to a singular page I think it would play a big advantage when comparing your resumes to other people.
Wen: Honestly Wen, this resume looks quite flawless to me as far as formatting and looks go. I like the way you get your messages across as well, concise, professional, and informative. Your objective is clear and your accolades support you for the mission you are looking to accomplish with the document. My singular piece of advice would be to fix one part of your format where there is extra white space in between your professional experience and skills and abilities. On top of that adjustment, I would then say you have more space to include more things to help your case because of the extra space you will have to work with.
Kiara
Overall I really liked your resume. I’m sure that it can be hard making one with only two job experiences but you did a great job navigating this. You have a great skill summary and I loved the bullet pointed section but just a small thing to mention is that there is an extra bullet point with no words. Another note on the bullet points is to add them to what skills you gained with each job. This will just make it easier to read. Great start!
Rachel
I know that you wish to pursue a career in law so I think that it will be very important for you to highlight any sort of law experience that you have. You could implement this into your skills section and put it first in your resume if you are applying to jobs in law. Something that I think you could also fix is the sizing of your lettering. Although I personally love how big your name is it is most common for resumes to have text to be sized 10-12 pt. Making anything above that smaller and then adding a skills portion should make your resume a page.
Grace
I thought your resume was very impressive and I loved that each of your bullet points started with a very to grab the employers attention. Something that I also loved was that the jobs you have and the sections were bolded, it brings your eye to them. If I were to change anything I would add an objective at the top and possibly try and space out a few things to make your resume a full two pages.